1G* Every correction makes me better with my computer skills: CELBAN writing sample

Update 2021

Dear Friend,

I often get requests from people for two things:

  • a sample of CELBAN Writing Task 2 and
  • sample questions for CELBAN Writing.

One of the things that I do is I teach my nurses how to create their own questions. That way they have an endless supply to write and speak about. 

(That is in Lesson one of CELBANPrep Writing Lesson One.)

For this reason it bothers me when people give the textbooks that are available on Amazon a low rating. Their comments show:

  1. They did not follow the instructions in the lesson.
  2. They think that they way they have been preparing for the IELTS should be the way they prepare for the CELBAN. They are wrong. 

The CELBANPrep Method teaches Internationally Educated Nurses how to teach themselves. It teaches them how to create an endless supply of writing prompts. 

So, I was so very impressed with the efforts of one of my Internationally Educated Nurses.

Often people come to CELBANPrep with fears and apprehension about using technology. Often this slows people down, stands in their way, or stops them from obtaining their dreams. A lack of computer skills and comfort with a computer also stops some people from subscribing to the online CELBANPrep courses. And that is a big problem for those who will be writing the CELBAN CBT, the computer based test available online.

***

Earlier this year I met an IEN who has faced many challenges when it comes to using a computer. What is amazing is that she has been willing to learn. So I have been giving her extra challenges, to help her develop confidence in her computer skills. 

I thought I would share with you what she did when she was creating a mindmap of information for CELBAN Writing Task 2. This she could then use to create a report. 

Here you can see for yourself not only the assignment and improvements made through the integration of feedback, but also read some of the comments both she and I have written.

Enjoy,

Kim


Posted Assignment

Notice the inconsistency in typing skills and formatting.

Name of patient : Jee

Reason for visit: chest pain and discomfort

Patient information: date of birth: 17th August (year, no additional information given)

Family information:

:father 50 years (farmer)

:mother, housewife (no additional information given)

: siblings ( no information given)

:father, high blood pressure.( 4-5 years)

Symptoms experienced: onset: 3-4 days, description: starts with numbness, then sharp stabbing pain (few minutes), frequency: no additional information given, location: radiates to the back ( not to arms or jaw)

Additional health information: no allergies to food, no allergies to medications, on calcium, multivitamins ( one year)

Current level of pain: pain 8 (out of 10)

Lifestyle choices

  •  exercises (3-4 days a week), stretching, yoga (1/2 hour), does not gym.
  • diet: vegetarian
  • non smoker
  • does not  drink coffee
  • drinks tea (2-3 times a day)
  • no drugs taken

Can you please use more formatting. How about creating a table to get your spacing correct?


Dear Dear Kim

Oh MY GOSH. It took me 45 minutes or more to get this in table format, then I  realized that I  had inserted way too many rows, I tried to delete it so very hard but I just could not get it right. I told myself Kim is going to have a good laugh at this.

You giving me computer lessons and you my celban teacher, I always said I striked a bonus when I  signed up for celban. Kim I really tried hard getting this right in table format, making it look neat and presentable. I pray that you would be pleased with my corrections.

God bless you

PS:every correction makes me better with my computer skills, you help me get through and make me believe yes I CAN DO IT EVENTUALLY.


Comment after second revision

Great Job! Are you ever persistent. Don’t worry, it takes me time to learn how to do things too,  and I am learning all the time. Considering that it takes 5 hours to edit a 2 minute video can you imagine how long it took me to create CELBANPrep?

OK. Here is how to start. Create a table with:

  • 7 rows (one for each class of information/heading)
  • 2 columns (one for headings, one for information.

It should look like this:

 Patient information

  •  jhlk
  • jklj
  • klj’l
   

 Family History

  •  kjlkj’lkj
  • klj’;lj;l
  • kjjk[p;
   
   
   
   

Then copy and past information into the table.

Kim


Dear Kim

WOW. Kim that is one great task correction I am going to have to follow. I am going to need a can of red bull, a big bowl of raisins and lots of energy bars to get my brain cells functioning for a table that  meets my teacher’s perfection. I have decided to go to sleep and do it only with a very very clear frame of mind, since seeing the first one took me ages to do. But I will do it.  God is with me.


Comment with final version

Dear Kim

I pray and hope that I did well on this one. I  corrected it about 5 times and played around with the table for a while before actually posting it. It was definately a learning experience for me. You sure make me try so very hard.

Thank you

Name of patient
  • Jee
Reason for visit
  • Chest pain and discomfort
Patient information
  • Date of birth: 17th August (year, no additional information given)
Family information
  • Father 50 years (farmer)
  • Mother, housewife (no additional information given)
  • Siblings (no information given)
  • Father, high blood pressure (4-5 years)
Symptoms experienced
  • Onset: 3-4 days
  • Description: starts with numbness, then sharp stabbing pain (few minutes)
  • Frequency: no additional information given
  • Location: radiates to the back (not to arms or jaw)
Additinal health information
  • No allergies to food
  • No allergies to medications
  • On calcium, multivitamins (one year)
Current level of pain
  • Pain 8 (out of 10)
Lifestyle choices
  • Exercises (3-4 days a week), stretching, yoga (1/2 hour) does not gym
  • No drugs taken
  • Diet:vegetarian
  • Non smoker
  • Does not drink coffee
  • Drinks tea (2-3 times a day)

E,


Isn’t that remarkable?

Would you be able to do something like that?

How long would it take you to create a report with these details?


Excellent R,

I hope than in the learning you are becoming more comfortable with exploring some of the computer functions. Look at the difference between your first post and your last one! Can you believe you did that!

In Canada appearance on paper is very important. Resumes are rejected on how they look. The interpretation is that people are unskilled, unorganized or sloppy. In a way this is part of the screening process.

Yes, I have been pushing you, because you are willing. But in the end you are learning important career life skills that hopefully in the end will bring you one step closer to achieving your goals. Computers are a way of life, in Canada. They are not going away. So learning how to embrace technology and all it has to offer will certainly better your life.

Besides, you have become an amazing role model!

You have done a most excellent job, R.
Kim


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