Tag Archives: Writing Sample for CELBAN

*3G ♫ Now I have a confidence in my writing!

Now I have a confidence in my writing!Hi Kim,

Now I have a confidence in my writing. When I wrote a letter to my supervisor, I could identify my errors. Run on sentences, verbs, punctuation and articles.
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2G* Writing for CELBAN and IELTS ~ Which is easier?

 

I feel confident in stating that the CELBAN is more easier than the IELTSDear Friend,

People from all over the world subscribe to CELBANPrep Writing Level One . When I read Rashin’s assignment I could see she was working very hard to incorporate vocabulary while writing about the pros and cons of children participating in sports. Having experience with the IELTS, I asked her to answer the question I am asked all the time: which is easier the IELTS or the CELBAN. Following are quotes from two conversations.

A war of words is being waged on the subject  of whether sport has positive impacts on children or not. I feel confident in stating that the pros outweigh cons.

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2G* CELBAN Writing ~ Incident Report. Can you spot the errors?

CELBAN Incident Report Writing

Dear Friends,

This is a great incident report written for CELBAN Writing during the CELBANPrep Writing Level Two. It is well written, except for a few errors. Can you identify the errors?

Kim

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2G* § How would you correct this sentence?

HOW Would you

This comes from a posted assignment, for the CELBANPrep Writing Level Two How would you correct it?

On July 19th at 20:30H, at St. Matthews Hospital, Kim Sapno, 14 year old girl admitted in emergency room accompanied by her mother. She had a complained of right lower abdominal pain.

Try rewriting these sentences before you click on read more to see some of my suggestions. Which do you prefer and why?

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3G* CELBAN or IELTS: writing reviewer

CELBAN or IELTS Writing Reviewer

Hi,

I want to purchase CELBAN Writing Task Specially Writing Task 1 can you send me the link form your website so that I can proceed.
Thanks, A

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6G*☺ You always makes me feel more confident and less stressful

Here is an example of an incident report written by a subscriber to CELBANPrep Writing. This is the result after several revisions. What follows is a discussion between me and the IEN who wrote the report.

Here is an example of an incident report...

Incident: 75 year old man found on the floor

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1G Horaaaaaaaaay, I did it [wrote a perfect report for CELBAN Writing] in 20 minutes

Dear Friend,

Every once in a while I post a report written by an IEN for CELBAN Writing during the CELBANPrep Writing Tutoring . Today I am posting this sample to show you that it is possible to write a complete, detailed and organized report in 20 minutes. This one was posted with only one small error. Here is my comment:  Wow, R!  … Perfect! How was the timing? She replied:

Dear Kim

Horaaaaaaaaay, I did it in 20 minutes… I hope that I can do it in a real exam.

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Nurse Behind Intravenous TubeOn March 22, 2012 at 3 pm, a mom shouted for help. Linda, a 5 y/o girl of bed #8, was found on the ground in her room. She was crying, and a sign of 2cm scratch was seen on her right knee; her IV line was dislodged, and a pool of blood and fluid was poured on the floor. Her mom expressed,” Linda was thirsty, I just went to bring her a glass of water; I forgot to raise the bed rails, and she fell down.” Head to toe assessment was done: she was pale, conscious and verbalized; she felt dizzy; she was crying and complaining of her knee’s pain 7 out of 10, where 1 as the least and 10 as the worst pain. Vitals were assessed: BP 80/50 mmHg, PR 110/min, RR 23/min, T 36.3 C. Dr. John was notified, his orders were carried out: a new IV line was inserted on the opposite hand; acetaminophen tab 200 mg PO stat was given, and repeated if pain> 6; brain CT Scan was taken to rule out head injury; X-Ray of her right knee was taken to rule out any fracture; her wound was cleaned and dressed. At 6 pm, she was totally conscious with no pain or dizziness. Vitals were BP 90/60 mmHg, PR 1oo/min, RR 20/min, T 36.9 C. The incident was reported to the supervisor. ………..R.RN

Note:

  • skills at advanced punctuation
  • vitals signs
  • pain scale
  • punctuation for quoting a witness

CELBANPrep Writing is a proven method for preparing IENs for writing organized, complete, detailed and error free reports for CELBAN Writing.

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Have a wonderful day!

Kim