Every once in a while I post a report written by an IEN for CELBAN Writing during the CELBANPrep Writing Level One and Two . Today I am posting this sample to show you that it is possible to write a complete, detailed and organized report in 20 minutes. This one was posted with only one small error. Here is my comment:
Wow, R! … Perfect! How was the timing? She replied:
Horaaaaaaaaay, I did it in 20 minutes… I hope that I can do it in a real exam.
Click on “Continue Reading” to read her report.
For CELBANPrep Writing IENs are encouraged to write both incident reports and assessment reports. Each assignment is reviewed several times, by a writing coach for the Writing Tutoring. Every once in a while I read a report that stands out. I am posting this one online, with permission from the writer.
Please pay attention to the following:
- medical documentation standards,
- avoidance of the word “I”,
- clear descriptions of observations,
- vital signs, and
- advanced punctuation.
This IEN worked hard to turn her weaknesses into strengths, during CELBANPrep Writing Level Two, and has become a master.
Also note, this report was written and edited with in 20 minutes using the skills taught in CELBANPrep Writing Level One and lots of practice.
The Canadian English Language Benchmark Assessment for Nurses is different from the IELTS because the topics for the CELBAN are familiar: about nursing or your personal experiences. For this reason the topics chosen for CELBANPrep Writing Level One
assignments are about nursing, personal experiences or something else that is a familiar topic to the writer. During CELBANPrep Writing Level One
, IENs work with a writing coach/tutor who provides individualized feedback on how each IEN can turn his or her weaknesses into strengths. This process continues for CELBANPrep Writing Level Two
, where assignments are in a nursing context: assessment and incident reports.
I was so pleased, and surprised when one of my IENs wrote about incident reports as her topic for an assignment for CELBANPrep Writing Level One
. She did such an excellent job I immediately knew I wanted to post it, so that I could share it with you!
This is a great incident report written for CELBAN Writing during the CELBANPrep Writing Level Two. It is well written, except for a few errors. Can you identify the errors?
This comes from a posted assignment, for the CELBANPrep Writing Level Two How would you correct it?
On July 19th at 20:30H, at St. Matthews Hospital, Kim Sapno, 14 year old girl admitted in emergency room accompanied by her mother. She had a complained of right lower abdominal pain.
Try rewriting these sentences before you click on read more to see some of my suggestions. Which do you prefer and why?
I just got my CELBAN test result today, I PASSED! S-10, R-10, L-10, W-8. I am really proud of my scores and I have you to thank for that.
I was confident when I took the test because I know that CELBANPrep prepared me for it. I have one thing to share to you so that you can also remind your students about it.
I was excited about the writing task because I know that with all the practices that I did with CELBANPrep, nothing can go wrong. Well, I was wrong!! I was already home when I started to think about the exam, I was happy with my performance until I remembered that I did not sign the incident report! Another thing, I wrote 4 paragraphs instead of 3! The instruction was to write an incident report with 1-3 paragraphs. This haunted me for a week!
What I’m trying to point out here is that students should have presence of mind during the test.
Thank you Kim and more power! Keep on empowering IENs to achieve our goals.
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65 year old male patient found on the floor by the elevator with IV pole.
- 65 year old male patient found on the floor by the elevator with IV pole.
- IV dislodged, a pool of blood found on the floor from IV site.
- A loud noise.
- No smell.
Good afternoon Kim,
My name is R, I am one of your student… I would like to thank you for all your guidance and support in my writing. Though, I felt so bad whenever I check my writing [CELBANPrep Writing Level One] there were lots colours for corrections- but for this corrections I improved and felt confident in doing an incident report [CELBANPrep Writing Level Two]. Honestly, I took IELTS exam 3 times, unfortunately I didn’t meet the score that they were requiring me to reach. Then I took Celban, first attempt I failed. Somehow, you gave me a chance … from that point I practice and practice until I got the confidence to overcome my fear of writing. Luckily, I got a schedule … for CELBAN exam … and I pass the exam. Kim, you put a mark in achieving my nursing career here in Canada.
Here is an example of an incident report written by a subscriber to CELBANPrep Writing Level Two. (She used CELBANPrep Writing One, and accessed Writing Coaching.) This is the result after several revisions. What follows is a discussion between me and the IEN who wrote the report.
Incident: 75 year old man found on the floor
Corticosteroids and antibiotics are prescribed to treat joint pain and sore throats.
I have a question again!! Do I need to change joint pain? It affects multiple joints.
This question was asked by an IEN during her CELBANPrep Writing Level Two writing tutoring session.