Every once in a while I post a report written by an IEN for CELBAN Writing during the CELBANPrep Writing one-on-one coaching (sold separately). Today I am posting this sample to show you that it is possible to write a complete, detailed and organized report in 20 minutes. This one was posted with only one small error. Here is my comment:
Wow, R! … Perfect! How was the timing? She replied:
Dear Kim
Horaaaaaaaaay, I did it in 20 minutes… I hope that I can do it in a real exam.
Check out the report she wrote! Notice how complete it is. Can you write a report like this, and have it this organized, in 20 minutes or less? ~Kim
For CELBANPrep Wonderful Writing IENs are encouraged to write both incident reports and assessment reports. When hiring one-on-one coaching, each assignment is reviewed several times, by a writing coach. Every once in a while I read a report that stands out. I am posting this one online, with permission from the writer.
The Canadian English Language Benchmark Assessment for Nurses is different from the IELTS because the topics for the CELBAN are familiar: about nursing or your personal experiences. For this reason the topics chosen for CELBANPrep Wonderful WritingΒ assignments are about nursing, personal experiences or something else that is a familiar topic to the writer. During Wonderful Writing, IENs work with a writing coach/tutor who provides individualized feedback on how each IEN can turn his or her weaknesses into strengths. This process continues for Wonderful Writing (CELBANPrep GOLD), where assignments are in a nursing context: assessment and incident reports.
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I was so pleased, and surprised when one of my IENs wrote about incident reports as her topic for an assignment for CELBANPrep Wonderful WritingΒ She did such an excellent job I immediately knew I wanted to post it, so that I could share it with you!
On July 19thΒ at 20:30H, at St. Matthews Hospital, Kim Sapno, 14 year old girl admitted in emergency room accompanied by her mother. She had a complained of right lower abdominal pain.
Try rewriting these sentences before you click on read more to see some of my suggestions. Which do you prefer and why?
Here is an example of an incident report written by an Internationally Educated Nurse who completed CELBANPrep online course: CELBAN Writing Task 1 and CELBAN Writing Task 1. (She used CELBANPrep Writing, and accessed Writing Coaching through CELBANPrep University.) This is the result after several revisions. What follows is a discussion between me and the IEN who wrote the report.