🏫 #15 Writing Sample ~ CELBAN Assessment Reports: turning weaknesses into strengths

Updated 2024 (This post has been in the Top 5, 10, and 20 for the past 3 years!!)

Dear Friends,

Embark on a journey with me, a journey through words and wisdom, a journey that every Internationally Educated Health Professional (IEHP) must undertake. Picture yourself in the midst of a bustling healthcare environment, where every report you pen is a bridge between patient care and medical understanding. This is the essence of CELBANPrep University’s Wonderful Writing (GOLD bundle), where you, as IENs and IEHPs, are not just learning to write but are mastering the art of communication in the healthcare setting. Today, I’m thrilled to share with you a shining example of this mastery, a report that not only adheres to our high standards but also radiates the hard work and dedication of its writer.

 


This report, crafted with precision and clarity, is a testament to the transformative journey of an IEN who turned her weaknesses into formidable strengths. As you delve into this report, I invite you to observe and learn from:

  1. The adherence to medical documentation standards – a cornerstone in patient care.
  2. The skillful avoidance of the word “I” – emphasizing objectivity and professionalism.
  3. The art of clear descriptions – where every observation paints a vivid picture.
  4. The accuracy in recording vital signs – a critical aspect of patient assessment.
  5. The use of advanced punctuation – the unsung hero of effective communication.


Use at least six key words from the following: diabetes, insulin, blood sugar level, needle, sugar, exercise


January 6, 2012 @ 01300H. Jessica Yap, 14 years old, came to ER complaining of dizziness. According to her mother, she was recently diagnosed with juvenile diabetes.  She does soccer and practices everyday after school for 1 hour.They were celebrating her 14th birthday today. After she ate a piece of her cake, she began trembling, became pale and complained that she was very dizzy, which prompted her mother to bring her to the hospital. Assessment were as follows: lethargic, cold and clammy skin, cyanotic nailbeds. Blood sugar level checked and revealed 400mg/dL. Vital signs were BP 110/80 mmHg, HR 110bpm, RR 23cpm, T 36 C. Dr. Andrew informed. His orders were carried out: PNSS 1000ml x 80ugtts/min started on (L) hand; HR 4 units SQ given; health teachings were given, focusing primarily on strict adherence to insulin regimen and diet, which the mother and the patient reported that they understood. Blood sugar level checked and recorded q hourly. At 0230H, blood sugar level was 200mg/dl. Endorsed to MS ward for continuity of care.——– IA R.N


This IEN’s journey through CELBANPrep University’s Wonderful Writing, armed with our textbook from Amazon and the enriching experience of the CELBAN online Writing course offered through CELBANPrep GOLD, exemplifies the growth and excellence you too can achieve. Remarkably, this report was crafted and refined within a mere 20 minutes, a showcase of the skills honed through dedication and practice.

As you read this report, let it inspire you. Let it be a beacon of what you can accomplish with commitment and hard work. This is not just about writing; it’s about empowering yourself to be the best in your field, to provide the best care, and to communicate with clarity and confidence.

Enjoy this read, absorb the lessons it holds, and remember, this level of mastery is within your reach.

Eager to hear your thoughts and reflections,

Kim


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Responses

  1. Ranjit kaur Avatar

    Hi ,
    Please give me exact idea about paragraphing in celban writing.
    How many paragraph should be written in incident report,

    Thanks
    R

    1. Kim Avatar

      Dear Ranjit,
      This is a great question, one I have not been asked before. On the CELBAN Readiness Self-Assessment the wording is “one or two paragraphs.” Depending on the version of the exam you get, you may receive different instructions. for this reason reading the instructions is imperative! And knowing how to write an assessment with a variation of paragraphing is essential in being prepared for the CELBAN.

      With that said, the distinction between a 6-7-8-9 in the Canadian Language Benchmark, the CLB, is paragraphing. People who know how to paragraph correctly get higher scores. (It is important to note that the CLB is the basis for the CELBAN: Canadian English Language Benchmark Assessment… for Nurses.)
      But remember, the CELBAN tasks require you to write reports NOT CHARTING! Some people get these two formats confused.

      Have a great weekend, Ranjit!
      Sincerely,
      Kim

  2. Cherry Sachdeva Avatar

    awesome report…

    1. Kim Avatar

      Thanks Cherry,
      IA is an amazing writer! She practiced really hard to get her timing just right!
      Kim

  3. IA Avatar

    Always a pleasure Kim! It’s nothing to what you have taught me. I thank you! 🙂 – IA

  4. Kim Avatar

    IA,
    I am so very proud! Thank you for the permission to post your writing.
    Kim

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